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feedback for presentation from Mike

Mike sent us an assessment sheet with his feedback for our presentation. The sheet has ratings by number, 10 being high and 1 being low, as well as brief comments from Mike. Here is what it has told me.

For knowledge and understanding of core materials we got a 7, which is slightly above average. We got the same score for Extent, quality and appropriateness of research, with Mike commenting 'Research evident but needs greater reflection on the presentations given by HOME'. As well as Conceptual grasp of issues, quality of arguments and ability to answer questions, where Mike commented 'Clear grasp of sustainability issues - not so much about issue of 'Perception'.

For design concepts we got a 6, which is average, and Mike commented 'good initial ideas but underdeveloped'. We also got a 6 for evolution of the ideas, with Mike saying 'Evidence of lots of initial ideas' 'But evolution of ideas was lacking visually'.

In the Quality of management section we got 7 for all the categories, with Mike just giving general feedback on how we did not introduce ourselves, did not have hand-outs, and not very many visuals.

We also got all 7s for the Quality of communication section, except for the confidence and fluency in English section, where we got a 6 because we did not reference to the semantic issue of crisis that HOME mentioned.

The overall feedback was:

"good evidence of preparation and engagement with the briefs central issues.The character idea had the greatest pull because of the accompanying visuals – but there was a sense that the ‘crisis’ aspect of the assignment was somehow lost - is this a concern? Should you be thinking about the key messages from the HOME team? Ask yourselves – will HOME want to adopt your idea? Will they be surprised/pleased at the thoroughness of your consideration and the ingenuity of your response. How will you know if your idea makes a positive contribution to raising awareness of HOME’s carbon neutrality profile? Are you meeting their aspirations to be leaders in this field? What about HOME’s concern with Transport? Are you going to target their chief concern
with the carbon issue around people travelling to and from HOME. Glenn – need to reflect on the claim that Cements ‘green’ and sustainable – I’m not so sure about this. Content within the APP is an issue that needs considering. Are your ideas radical enough?"

I agree with parts of what Mike said, however I believe that we don't always have to have hand-outs, as well as this being a pitch more than a full presentation, which is why we did not have that many visuals.

From this feedback I have learnt that for the final presentation we should introduce ourselves, have more visuals, speak more about the issues HOME focus on, and to reflect upon our research.

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